cartoon_anvil 0 #1 October 31, 2011 So here's the deal... This site Threadless lets users submit their own designs. If the design gets enough votes, it goes to press, and the submitter gets $2,000. My design is a freeflyer going head-down. I have not officially "submitted" the design, right now, it's up for "critique." I'm just looking for some people to give me some feedback on the design. Would you rock it? Do you think it sucks so bad that I should be sterilized, preventing future generations from being subjected to my progeny? You can see the design here: http://www.threadless.com/critique/96413/Head_Down Any feedback is appreciated. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Austintxflight 0 #2 October 31, 2011 sterilize him!!!! use a deboner knife. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Chiquita 12 #3 October 31, 2011 Making it clicky will get more people to look at it. http://www.threadless.com/critique/96413/Head_Down"Ego is the anesthesia that deadens the pain of stupidity" Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cartoon_anvil 0 #4 October 31, 2011 QuoteMaking it clicky will get more people to look at it. http://www.threadless.com/critique/96413/Head_Down Thanks, I missed that... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Galenis 0 #5 November 1, 2011 What's the deal with the little symbols on the shoulders? Those could go and it would be a pretty cool shirt.It's time for my nightly ritual: Pleasure myself, weep, and repeat. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
JohnMitchell 14 #6 November 1, 2011 You got some good creativity there, but that one didn't light my hair on fire. The focus is too far down the shirt and the symbols are distracting. Give us some more to look at. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Arvoitus 1 #7 November 1, 2011 Are you more interested in the 2k $ reward or designing your own shirts? If latter, then there are places where you can design your own shirts and get them printed without any voting going on : like this.Your rights end where my feelings begin. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Coreece 189 #8 November 1, 2011 Most people would've voted "No" but they just don't wish you ill fortune. The concept is cool but.... The colorscheme is not working...It is rather bland and there is just way too much contrast. If black and red is what you're going for, then try to disperse the design and the edge feathering throughout the shirt and add a little more opacity so it blends better...you also should include shades of red within the center design and the dispersed edge feathering...possibly a soft flame-like feathering. I would reduce the size of the jumper and add detail including a red rig,helemet,shoes with a redish glow between the jumper and the black/gray design. I would also move the jumper closer to the middle, but don't center him completely, while having the design extend out over the left shoulder. Play with this concept a bit so it blends well with the opposite shoulder so it won't look so disconcerting It also might even be a nice touch to have the jumper wearing the shirt design itself... Overall, I think if you personify the jumper enough so that people can sense a relation to that character and soften the design, you'll be alright as long as you get enough skydivers to vote... It will also be helpful to understand various colorschemes and take notice of the subtleties of detail that give a sense of true professionalism. good luck have fun...Your secrets are the true reflection of who you really are... Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shropshire 0 #9 November 1, 2011 I agree. Great concept - "Cool but needs work" The contrast is too high - the black is way too black - try fading the whole thing back ... Love the Red tho I think that the graphic inside the spokes adds nothing but clutter and detracts from the jumper -... does not lead you in - a simple grey fade may work better I like the positioning of the elemental tho (.)Y(.) Chivalry is not dead; it only sleeps for want of work to do. - Jerome K Jerome Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Squeak 17 #10 November 1, 2011 Quote I agree. Great concept - "Cool but needs work" The contrast is too high - the black is way too black - try fading the whole thing back ... Love the Red tho I think that the graphic inside the spokes adds nothing but clutter and detracts from the jumper -... does not lead you in - a simple grey fade may work better I like the positioning of the elemental tho See that's where it's going to get awkward, I think the Red BLOWS chunks and I like the blackbut i do agree that the spokes are distracting and i like my Freefly images complete You are not now, nor will you ever be, good enough to not die in this sport (Sparky) My Life ROCKS! How's yours doing? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shah269 0 #11 November 1, 2011 NICE! HOPE THEY MAKE IT Life through good thoughts, good words, and good deeds is necessary to ensure happiness and to keep chaos at bay. The only thing that falls from the sky is birdshit and fools! Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
Squeak 17 #12 November 1, 2011 Quote NICE! HOPE THEY MAKE IT Well there's the "Death Nell", Shah likes itYou are not now, nor will you ever be, good enough to not die in this sport (Sparky) My Life ROCKS! How's yours doing? Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cartoon_anvil 0 #13 November 1, 2011 QuoteWhat's the deal with the little symbols on the shoulders? Those could go and it would be a pretty cool shirt. Thanks. I had actually removed those later on, but I had already exported the jpg before I did that. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
cartoon_anvil 0 #14 November 1, 2011 QuoteMost people would've voted "No" but they just don't wish you ill fortune. The concept is cool but.... The colorscheme is not working...It is rather bland and there is just way too much contrast. If black and red is what you're going for, then try to disperse the design and the edge feathering throughout the shirt and add a little more opacity so it blends better...you also should include shades of red within the center design and the dispersed edge feathering...possibly a soft flame-like feathering. I would reduce the size of the jumper and add detail including a red rig,helemet,shoes with a redish glow between the jumper and the black/gray design. I would also move the jumper closer to the middle, but don't center him completely, while having the design extend out over the left shoulder. Play with this concept a bit so it blends well with the opposite shoulder so it won't look so disconcerting It also might even be a nice touch to have the jumper wearing the shirt design itself... Overall, I think if you personify the jumper enough so that people can sense a relation to that character and soften the design, you'll be alright as long as you get enough skydivers to vote... It will also be helpful to understand various colorschemes and take notice of the subtleties of detail that give a sense of true professionalism. good luck have fun... Thank you for the constructive criticism. That's why I came here, so I could have people tell me that, because of course friends are just going to tell me it kicks ass even if it sucks balls. Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shropshire 0 #15 November 1, 2011 Quote NICE! HOPE THEY MAKE IT shhhhh - stop shouting (.)Y(.) Chivalry is not dead; it only sleeps for want of work to do. - Jerome K Jerome Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
shropshire 0 #16 November 1, 2011 Far from sucks - just needs tweaking .... for some tastes (.)Y(.) Chivalry is not dead; it only sleeps for want of work to do. - Jerome K Jerome Quote Share this post Link to post Share on other sites
